Okay so on to book 2. All the book 2 chapter titles are quotes from the Once and Future King. I read that for research while working on Misfits of Avalon and really enjoyed it. I thought this quote described Morgan pretty well.
Page 1 – 3
So I wanted to return to Morgan’s dream to reenforce that she is more connected to what is going on. Like the last book her dream is a hint at what will happen later. Also these dreams are making this whole mission is wearing on her more than the other girls.
Page 4 – 7
Morgan’s walk in the middle of night, I wanted to show a quiet moment of reflection. Also she is getting drawn to the tree and didn’t intend to walk there. I didn’t know if that was clear during her walk. I hoped that her slowly going to touch it might have shown that.
In this whole bit with Cu I tried to position him above Morgan. So while he is warning her, he is coming off as vaguely threatening. Then once he doesn’t know what is going on with Morgan’s dreams as much as she does, they are on equal footing.
Page 8 – 13
Morgan finding Billy is to mostly give them some alone time and give them a connection that builds in the rest of the book. There are small things in this scene that change as they are repeated later. Like Morgan doesn’t let Billy help her up. Her kicking him to wake him up I felt was very Morgan. I also wanted to give a bit more info about both their family lives.
This scene I also wanted to show something more mystical is going on with both of them. They are both drawn to the tree.
I always try to play with background details when I got time. To show how much time as past since Morgan woke up, made sure to show the coffee shop opening up and some early morning deliveries. So it’s still early but the rest of the world is starting to wake up.
The end of this scene is the first time Morgan smiles when she’s not being mean.
Page 14 – 18
This whole scene I put little lines under Morgan’s eyes to show she is tired. I had to be careful with them cause if they are too prominent she’ll look older.
Elsie being continues to try and be Morgan’s friend by being loud. But she is also including Morgan in her gang. Their dialogue is supposed to give you an idea of what they talk about all the time and how Morgan has no patiences for it even when they aren’t antagonizing her. So even as Elsie is trying to include her Morgan is still isolated. She never engages or responses to Amanda and Lin.
Page 19 – 20
Since we’ve already seen Morgan’s dream I made an abridged version. But also I wanted to show how they happen almost immediately. So Morgan is not getting like any sleep.